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Keep Hoping Machine Running ([personal profile] thefourthvine) wrote2013-01-01 11:02 am
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Yuletide: Reveal!

I wrote one story for Yuletide 2012, for the doughty [personal profile] shrift, who gave me the best prompts in the world.

This Side of Paradise (17031 words) by thefourthvine
Chapters: 1/1
Fandom: The Losers (2010)
Rating: Explicit
Warning: No Archive Warnings Apply
Relationships: Carlos "Cougar" Alvarez/Jake Jensen

"I'm a good boyfriend," Cougar said.

I tell you what: in the planning stages, this story seemed like it would be fun and short, but it really only delivered on the fun front. I blame Jensen. Key lesson learned this Yuletide: If you want to write a Yuletide story that's less than 10k, don't use the motormouth's point of view. Use the PoV of the laconic guy with the sarcastic eyebrows. I mean, Cougar doesn't go into lengthy digressions about rude Canadians and the etiquette of three-ways and Star Trek.

And speaking of geeky movies, I totally salute [personal profile] thehoyden and [personal profile] frostfire for pointing out, during my Fucking Chris Evans Is in Fucking Everything breakdown, that he's never been in Star Trek. (And I salute [personal profile] frostfire for this conversation via IM while I was deep in the middle of writing this:

Frostfire: Hi! How are you?
Frostfire: Did you watch Wrath of Khan again?
Frostfire: Awwwwwww.

Fandom: the place where people will always understand when you're sobbing incoherently about how he TOUCHES HIS CHAIR OH GOD.)

So, anyway. This story, thanks to Why Jake Can't Shut Up Jensen, became so long that I was in the painful position of not even being able to complain on Twitter about how long it was, because that might de-anon me. But it was a barrel of fun to write, for real.

And Nestra, Norah, Queue, and thehoyden were heroes of Yuletide for beta-reading this with such aplomb. Thanks, guys! Next year, I will try for shorter, and also way fewer run-on sentences. I swear.
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[personal profile] kayim 2013-01-01 07:18 pm (UTC)(link)
This one is on my "must-read-when-I-get-time" list.

But now I know it's yours, I might just have to *make* time :)
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[personal profile] sasha_feather 2013-01-01 07:29 pm (UTC)(link)
OMG I loved this story! It was great! I appreciated that it had a non-angsty, funny coming-out narrative.
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[personal profile] chalcopyrite 2013-01-01 07:34 pm (UTC)(link)
Ooh, perfect timing! While writing and editing my exchange stories, I tripped and fell and accidentally The Losers (because what you need when writing in two related fandoms is a third, completely different, new fandom crush), and not being in the fandom, I didn't know where to look for good stuff. I look forward to this!

(I can read it when I am procrastinating from editing *another* story in no way related.... /o\)
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Nestra, Norah, Queue, thehoyden

[personal profile] lemon_badgeress 2013-01-01 07:53 pm (UTC)(link)
Psssssssst. Pssssssssst.

Next year, I will try for [...] way fewer run-on sentences. I swear. <----this is actually a lie
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[personal profile] umbo 2013-01-01 07:53 pm (UTC)(link)
I loved that story!
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[personal profile] paceus 2013-01-01 08:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Hee, I read this post and then glanced back to the headers to see how many words there were, exactly. And my eyes widened. :D

I find motormouths easier to write, though. It feels more satisfying to write hundreds of words in an hour than being in agony for an hour, only to produce twenty words. I've found that to write a story where X, Y and Z happen, a laconic character might take thousands of words less to tell it, but I'd still be writing and thinking pretty much the same time as with a verbose character.
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[personal profile] katemonkey 2013-01-01 08:12 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh heavens!

It was an utterly fabulous story, and I am so glad that it exists.

And, yeah, Jensen is a bit of a pain when it comes to his point of view, because good lord, boy, shut up!
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[personal profile] sophisted 2013-01-01 08:28 pm (UTC)(link)
I would beg you to write more, but I know you probably don't have the time except to do it once a year. Even when I don't know the fandom, your fics are always extremely engaging. Just the way your write the characters, they always sound so real. Also, I watched Kiss Kiss Bang Bang because of your fic, and it's become one of my favorite movies. ;) If you ever thought to write original fiction, I would be all over it in a heartbeat, just so you know.

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[personal profile] veronamay 2013-01-01 09:01 pm (UTC)(link)
Fuck Chris Evans, seriously. I'm on the tail end of a similar breakdown and that guy is just Not Playing Fair.

Looking forward to reading this! My love for Cougar/Jensen cannot be textually rendered.

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[personal profile] fairestcat 2013-01-01 09:02 pm (UTC)(link)
I LOVE that story.

Also, of COURSE you wrote that fic. As soon as I saw the reveal I went, "really, I should have known!"
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[personal profile] nestra 2013-01-01 11:56 pm (UTC)(link)
I kept the secret! And seriously, my beta help consisted of her saying "Do you think shrift would like a story where they pretend to be boyfriends on a tropical island?" and me saying "YES, YES SHE WOULD."

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[personal profile] fanofall 2013-01-01 09:57 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh my god of COURSE you wrote that. I LOVED EVERY WORD OF IT, and I cannot believe I didn't guess it was you. I knew it was someone I knew, but I was not able to narrow it down further...

[personal profile] tevere 2013-01-01 10:04 pm (UTC)(link)
I don't know The Losers! I should remedy that, clearly. I actually thought you'd written the Sports Night one!
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[personal profile] msilverstar 2013-01-01 11:34 pm (UTC)(link)
Love that fic, it was perfect Jensen!
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[personal profile] dorinda 2013-01-02 01:13 am (UTC)(link)
Frostfire: Hi! How are you?
Frostfire: Did you watch Wrath of Khan again?

I have been on your end of that exact same conversation! I have to be careful when I watch that vid--right before leaving for work, for instance? BAD TIME.

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[personal profile] lorax 2013-01-02 04:18 am (UTC)(link)
I have that one on my to-read list!

And I am RIGHT WITH YOU on the "not being able to complain in public because it might out me" thing. I did that lengthwise on Yuletide AND another exchange this year.
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[personal profile] out_there 2013-01-03 12:06 pm (UTC)(link)
Dude! *high five*

Your story does deserve the awesome honour of "fandom I can't really remember but man, that plot idea sounds awesome and the first paragraph reads so well, I have to save this story to read later and eventually leave feedback".

...I haven't finished reading and so haven't left feedback, but it's still rare for me to commit to read something where I think of it as "Um, that action show that had the dad from Supernatural in it".

This Is Lovely, But...

(Anonymous) 2013-03-17 10:43 pm (UTC)(link)
I actually read through this story and enjoyed and now maybe want to read more fanfic of it (pretty much all of my fandoms have come through wandering onto a cool fanfic) but that isn't why I'm writing this.

I'm writing this because I think you're quite interesting (pretty cool? certainly awesome?) and being the person I am, I wanted to see if I could get you to read (or if you've already read) Closer by rainjoyswriting. It includes humour, banter, something that's mostly magic but involves a lot of science, and it is my very favourite slash romance fanfic I've ever read, even though it's incomplete and likely to stay that way. And I am not normally a romantic person. It does have one of your squicks (serious power imbalances, I did my research). That's actually one of my personal squicks as well - but I started reading Closer and loved it. It helps that the story actually addresses the issue and does it in a serious way that makes you believe that a relationship between the two characters is actually plausible.

I'd ask you to give it a chance. Just the first chapter. Which is at I understand if you don't want to waste your time on something you can't be sure will be good, so if you don't intend to read it, please just tell me. I'll probably offer up other stories I like in an attempt to convince you I have good taste - unless you ask me to back off, in which case of course I will.

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